Should I propose her now? Can she hear? Her husband stands with
her and so her kids, relatives.Should I spoil this ceremony? Why did I waste all these years?I’m doing it.
He had made his mind to let her know and walked towards her.
By then the old Priest had closed her COFFIN.
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91 Comments:) so far. Teach me with your comments..
sooooooooooper 55 :) :) COFFIN ah??? kavunthiduchu plan :P :P sooper dooper :)
@Uma UthraHEHE THANKS :D cute comment !
Another nice post... :):):)
@AbhinavThanks a ton abhinav :D
LOl.. you cracked me up on this:)
@KajalHaha Glad for that :) Thank you
awesome one deepak...seriously...I loved this one... :)
That was bloody intense! WOW!
Good one
Superb, bro . . . . You have proved that love never ends, it prevail even after death . . . .
Good one Dee :)
Awesome..your best 55 fiction till date. :) :)
@CYNOSUREThanks sarab :)
@AKILA VENKATThanks AKila, Keep visiting !
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@Ashwini DeyThanks a ton Ashwini.. Keep visiting
@~iyshu~Thanks Iysh !
Intensity personified :)
Nice one Dee :D
@SanjanaThank you SAnjana !
@vinayBRO :P thanks a ton... all for you to MAKE A MOVIE in future:D
Oh my god!! What a total turn of events.
I expected an Happy Ending and "wow".
Extremely good Dee :D ;).
Loved it <3
This is my first chance to read ur fiction.. When I was reading the first two lines I was shocked and was almost curious to know what happens next and coffin part really took me by surprise . I felt Oh no! in my heart.. good one ...
Nice twist to the tale :-) You are becoming a pro with 55..
Wow!! That was a good one!!
@Princess PooTHANKS PRINCESS :D
@Rambling Of A Single Girl In The CityThank you so much
visit often :D
@Rambling Of A Single Girl In The CityThank you so much
visit often :D
@DivyaThanks a ton :) a comment from you is spl :)
@jaish_vatsThank you so much :)
Sad.. But i was able to understand
wow , that one was really touching bst uptil now, grt goin :)
@Smile :-)Glad for that :) thank you :D
@saikat mbka ghoshthanks saikat :D
awww...that was a good one! after reading urs..even i feel like writing a 55-er..been ages that i wrote one :D
sarah
short and neatly written . will be remembered for long.
@subtlescribbler u too write.. am addicted to it :D thanks for the visit !
@indiraThanks Indira JI !
Woaaaaa...Awesome Dude!!!!!! I just had goosebumps reading the last line! Phenomenal :)
Oh My God. That was wonderful. By far, your best I'd say :-)
@Arnab MaityThanks a ton bro :)
@Ashwini C Naha Thank you so much :D
ooops too late thats why they say its better ot tell the person what you have in your heart .. so you dont have to repent thinking what could have been ..
lovely 55'r
Bikram's
Love never dies...Nicely written Deepak:)
@Bikramjitthanks a ton bikram ji !
@Saru SinghalThank you saru :D
You are going great guns with this 55 fiction..
@Rayyan Rizwanwow, thanks rayyan :D
LOL! It's sad but why am I finding this funny? Deepak,I think you add a potion of funniness to every post of yours,invisibly! :P :)
wicked!! i loved it !
smart write...intelligently done. thanks for sharing
In very few words you expressed so many things about true love ( i guess its love and not necrophilia :p)...Kudos !!!
Too late. That's so sad.
What a coincidence, a few minutes ago I came across a quote on fb, that said -- If you love someone, tell them. Because hearts are often broken with words left unspoken. ~ Joyzamira Garza
profound? im not sure I understand the post :)
Lovely 55'er. Nice but sad twist at the end :(
@Jen..The Butterfly Effect LOL IS IT???? i never thought that a serious thing will go funny :D :D thanks Jen !
@DellaThanks Della :D
@Shamsud Thank you SHamsud ! keep visiting :D
@deepbaazigarHEHE :D thanks bro !
@D.Nambiar wonderful.. coincidence :D thanks for the visit :D
@Life Unordinary ?? i can't get you JI.. you mean you don't understand it ?
@VaishHAHA.. thanks for the visit and comment !
The end was shocking. Good job with the story.
Ouch! that hurts! :( may be they are meant to be together in their next birth.. Good job Deepak! :)
Its really very true Deepak. Men wait and time flies by ...They forget that time is worth more and their fears..
@RachnaThanks Rachna ji !
@Harithaaha ! u finished it on a hopeful note :) thankssss a ton !
@Jerlythanks jerly.. nice to see you back :D
Nicely written :)
It is never too late - may be she will come out of the coffin after hearing the proposal
nice one...took me by surprise :)
Hey Deepak you're a Genius...man!!
Oh dear Dee...I initially thought the man was about to declare his love....:-) Awesome...
Quite a tragedy, Deepak. One wonders why love couldn't bloom earlier.
@SHANOJ KThanks Shanoj !
@Meera SundararajanRightly said !
@Vinita KherdekarGlad for that.. Keep visiting !
@AmitAagKya amitaag JI.. genius ??? nahi ! THANKS FOR THE VISIT
@Suchihaha thanks suchi !
@matheikalThanks uncle :D
nice layout and specially the muse gesture on yours blog been fantastic
@MOHAN MANOHARThank you so much !
That's touching....Nice post :)
good one.. :)
Black Irony!
This is one hell of an awesome post! You have really improved in this 55 fiction you know! Keep writing more stuff like this!:)
freakin' awesome!!!!!!!!
Mind blowing! "can she hear"..."should i spoil this ceremony?" simply amazing Deepak. Following it.
Fantastic.. What a turnaround..
Well it is the story of many of our youngsters of yesterday who did not have the guts to express their love and marry the person of the choice.Family, Responsibility to sisters, caste,religion are some of the cowardly excuses one used to offer.You have just so poetically captured this cowardice. Keep it up
I had similar views and had tweeted about it. Human Rights commission always supports the wrong people for the wrong cause. They do not come to help a common man, but they come from some corner just when a police encounter a gang. I say the robbers deserved it, Despite whatever intention of the Police. Some times these Human Rights commission acts so stupid!
cynical eh??
Thanks a Ton for your words :) Keep visiting :)