COVERT -55 fiction



Should I propose her now? Can she hear? Her husband stands with her and so her kids, relatives. Should I spoil this ceremony? Why did I waste all these years? I’m doing it.
He had made his mind to let her know and walked towards her. 
By then the old Priest had closed her COFFIN.



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91 comments:

  1. sooooooooooper 55 :) :) COFFIN ah??? kavunthiduchu plan :P :P sooper dooper :)

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  2. LOl.. you cracked me up on this:)

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  3. awesome one deepak...seriously...I loved this one... :)

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  4. Superb, bro . . . . You have proved that love never ends, it prevail even after death . . . .

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  5. Awesome..your best 55 fiction till date. :) :)

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  6. Intensity personified :)
    Nice one Dee :D

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  7. @vinayBRO :P thanks a ton... all for you to MAKE A MOVIE in future:D

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  8. Oh my god!! What a total turn of events.
    I expected an Happy Ending and "wow".
    Extremely good Dee :D ;).
    Loved it <3

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  9. This is my first chance to read ur fiction.. When I was reading the first two lines I was shocked and was almost curious to know what happens next and coffin part really took me by surprise . I felt Oh no! in my heart.. good one ...

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  10. Nice twist to the tale :-) You are becoming a pro with 55..

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  11. @DivyaThanks a ton :) a comment from you is spl :)

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  12. Sad.. But i was able to understand

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  13. wow , that one was really touching bst uptil now, grt goin :)

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  14. awww...that was a good one! after reading urs..even i feel like writing a 55-er..been ages that i wrote one :D

    sarah

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  15. short and neatly written . will be remembered for long.

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  16. @subtlescribbler u too write.. am addicted to it :D thanks for the visit !

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  17. Woaaaaa...Awesome Dude!!!!!! I just had goosebumps reading the last line! Phenomenal :)

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  18. Oh My God. That was wonderful. By far, your best I'd say :-)

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  19. ooops too late thats why they say its better ot tell the person what you have in your heart .. so you dont have to repent thinking what could have been ..

    lovely 55'r

    Bikram's

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  20. Love never dies...Nicely written Deepak:)

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  21. You are going great guns with this 55 fiction..

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  22. LOL! It's sad but why am I finding this funny? Deepak,I think you add a potion of funniness to every post of yours,invisibly! :P :)

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  23. smart write...intelligently done. thanks for sharing

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  24. In very few words you expressed so many things about true love ( i guess its love and not necrophilia :p)...Kudos !!!

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  25. Too late. That's so sad.
    What a coincidence, a few minutes ago I came across a quote on fb, that said -- If you love someone, tell them. Because hearts are often broken with words left unspoken. ~ Joyzamira Garza

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  26. profound? im not sure I understand the post :)

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  27. Lovely 55'er. Nice but sad twist at the end :(

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  28. @Jen..The Butterfly Effect LOL IS IT???? i never thought that a serious thing will go funny :D :D thanks Jen !

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  29. @D.Nambiar wonderful.. coincidence :D thanks for the visit :D

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  30. @Life Unordinary ?? i can't get you JI.. you mean you don't understand it ?

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  31. The end was shocking. Good job with the story.

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  32. Ouch! that hurts! :( may be they are meant to be together in their next birth.. Good job Deepak! :)

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  33. Its really very true Deepak. Men wait and time flies by ...They forget that time is worth more and their fears..

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  34. @Harithaaha ! u finished it on a hopeful note :) thankssss a ton !

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  35. It is never too late - may be she will come out of the coffin after hearing the proposal

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  36. Hey Deepak you're a Genius...man!!

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  37. Oh dear Dee...I initially thought the man was about to declare his love....:-) Awesome...

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  38. Quite a tragedy, Deepak. One wonders why love couldn't bloom earlier.

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  39. @AmitAagKya amitaag JI.. genius ??? nahi ! THANKS FOR THE VISIT

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  40. nice layout and specially the muse gesture on yours blog been fantastic

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  41. This is one hell of an awesome post! You have really improved in this 55 fiction you know! Keep writing more stuff like this!:)

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  42. Mind blowing! "can she hear"..."should i spoil this ceremony?" simply amazing Deepak. Following it.

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  43. Well it is the story of many of our youngsters of yesterday who did not have the guts to express their love and marry the person of the choice.Family, Responsibility to sisters, caste,religion are some of the cowardly excuses one used to offer.You have just so poetically captured this cowardice. Keep it up

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  44. I had similar views and had tweeted about it. Human Rights commission always supports the wrong people for the wrong cause. They do not come to help a common man, but they come from some corner just when a police encounter a gang. I say the robbers deserved it, Despite whatever intention of the Police. Some times these Human Rights commission acts so stupid!

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